“The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.”

“The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.”
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The bar chart compares the proportion of overseas pupils and the rate of citizens in the United Kingdom who graduated with a second-class degree or better at a main university in the United Kingdom in 2009.  
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people from Britain who have graduated with a second-class
honors
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degree or greater from a major university
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the UK are more likely to study English literature, art history, international law, and sociology, each is higher than for foreign
students
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. In electrical engineering and information technology, the higher proportion was for foreign
students
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.
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, the percentage of nursing and accountancy
students
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was similar for UK and international
students
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.  
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the percentage of graduates from the UK with second
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degrees or greater is highest in art history and sociology at 70%, respectively, the highest trade went to information technology for overseas populations at 80%.  
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, both
students
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have the same figure for nursing and accounting at roughly 78% and 60%, respectively.
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, the biggest gap in the two categories was for international law, by more than 20%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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