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The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart presents the percentage of different global
illiteracy
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, divided by gender,
that
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estimated
different
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in different
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 regions in 2000.
Overall
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, it is conspicuous that
sub-saharan
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sub-Saharan
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 Africa, Arab states, and South
Asia
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 have
high
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a high
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rate
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in
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of
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illiteracy
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comparing
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compared
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 with the rest regions.
Although
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 these societies
exist
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have
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higher
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a higher
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rate
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 of
illiteracy
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, East
Asia
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/Oceania and Latin America/Caribbean have a lower
rate
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in
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of
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illiteracy
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 both male and female. Arab states and South
Asia
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 had some
samilarity
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similarity
familiarity
. These regions both had over 50% and nearly 30%
illiteracy
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rate
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rates
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 in
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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, respectively. Sub-Saharan Africa had
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a
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48% female
illiteracy
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rate
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 more than male (30%).
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Conversely
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although
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 East
Asia
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/Oceania and
Labin
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Latin
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 America/
Cabribbean
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Caribbean
 have some similar
in
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apply
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male
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rate
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rates
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 (about 10%), there had a
consipicuous
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conspicuous
 disparity in
female
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females
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. East
Asia
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/Oceania have
near
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nearly
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 20%
felamel
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felafel
, which is twice times of Latin America/
Caribbran
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Caribbean
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, asia, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy rates
  • gender gap
  • regional disparities
  • socio-economic factors
  • male literacy
  • female literacy
  • overviews
  • notable differences
  • highest literacy regions
  • moderate literacy regions
  • lowest literacy regions
  • estimated data
  • educational attainment
  • cultural influences
  • development levels
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