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The chart details the length of different quality water in rivers in England, water quality of English rivers (in 1000s km) at 1993-2003

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The bar chart provides information with data about the
water
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quality
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 in the England rivers in terms of good, fair or poor over a period of 10
years
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, from 1993 to 2003.
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, it is evident that the largest percentage of
water
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quality
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 of English rivers was
a
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good
while
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, fair and poor
water
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 had
lowest
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the lowest
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.
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detailed
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 analysis, the chart illustrates that in the first three
years
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 of the period shown, good
water
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quality
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 increased significantly by a
further
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 6.500 kilograms.
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this
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 ,from 1996 to 1998, there was mild
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 f"ranging between 19 and 18.500
kilometres
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. Followed by
rapid
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rose
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 to reach a peak of 24 km in 2002 , before once again dropping to 21
kilometres
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in
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 the end of
decade
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.
On the other hand
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, fair and poor
water
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 had
lowest
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the lowest
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 il in England rivers, which
in
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 the beginning of the four
years
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, there was a slight increase in fair
water
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 from 12.500 to about 13
kilometres
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,
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however
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this
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 percentage experienced falls to solely 8
kilometres
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 in 2002 and
then
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 climbing by one per cent
in
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 the end of decade given .
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 , poor
water
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quality
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 decreased sharply from 9.500 to 2
kilometres
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 . And over
next
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the next
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 two
years
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 , poor
water
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 went up by 2.500 . After small
fluctuations
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it's
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 arrived
4
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kilometres
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in
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 the end of 2003.

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coherence
Clarify and simplify the language used to present ideas, especially regarding numerical values and trends.
coherence
Provide a conclusion that summarizes the key points without introducing new information.
task achievement
Ensure that all numerical data mentioned are accurate and clearly express the changes observed in the chart.
task achievement
The essay effectively introduces the topic and provides a clear overview of the water quality categories.
coherence
The essay attempts to provide a detailed analysis of the data presented over the specified period.

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