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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people in the UK who ate the recommended amount of fruit and vegetables every day from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
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, women adhere more to the diet recommendations compared to men and children over the period.
In addition
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, most of the population fed on the advised food in 2006.
Moreover
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, all the categories experienced a fluctuating measure through the years.
To begin
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 with, in 2006, females recorded the highest percentage at 35% which was approximately one and a-half-fold the number of children in the same year.
Furthermore
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, the proportion of juveniles that followed the diet guidelines in 2004 significantly rose by 11% in 2006 before slightly declining to 26% by the end of 2007.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of males gender that consumed fruits and vegetables reached its peak in 2006 at 27%
although
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 its numbers fluctuated over the period.

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