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Writing Samples
Band 4

In some developing countries, people prefer to invest their money in businesses outside their own country. What are the reasons for this? What can governments do to change this trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
individuel
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individual
individuals
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money
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 in other
countries
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due to
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 their
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 have applied
a
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high
taxes
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 for developing fast or countriess'
currency
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 is
weknees
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weak
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people
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 cannot earn a less profit
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leads to
people
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 invenst their
money
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 in other
countries
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strong
currency
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. In
this
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 essay, I will explain my reasons behind
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 phenomenon before presenting the solution.
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society
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 of several
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 have performed
taxes
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for
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 many stuff
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tax
tv
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 even if they do not use it, Income
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,
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cars
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,
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houses
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 that
leads
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lead
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people
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think
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to invest their
money
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 in foreign
countries
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 or at least hide their
money
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 far from governments because they do not
want
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 pay
taxes
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especally
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especially
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taxes
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.
Also
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 currencies of
countries
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 play an important action
of
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invest that
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 means some
people
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 concentrate on a strong
currency
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due
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apply
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to earn
highest
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 profit than other
countries
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, In 2000 CCO studied and
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on
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a
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invest
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countries
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 and
CCo
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dicovered
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discovered
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, It was the most important factor is a strong
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,
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 have several solutions for those problems.
First
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 they should give many advantages
for
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who
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those who
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 invest their
money
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such
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 as they do not
perform
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performing
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 any
king
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kind
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 of
taxes
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 for
a
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 long term or
discount
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discounting
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 their own
taxes
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 if they invest more
money
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. They will create
competion
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competition
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people
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 to invest
whose
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money
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 inside
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. in conclusion,
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although
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investors prefer to find businesses abroad rather than inside their own
countries
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due to
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a
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apply
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high
taxes
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 which leads
people
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less
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to less
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earn
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apply
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profit.

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structure
Clarify your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear main point. For example, your analysis of taxes can be better structured to clearly link the high taxes to investment decisions.
language
Proofread your essay for spelling and grammatical accuracy, as small errors can distract from your argument. For instance, 'weknees' should be 'weakness' and 'invenst' should be 'invest'.
examples
Expand on your examples to provide more context. The reference to the 2000 CCO study could be better explained, as details about the study would strengthen your argument.
introduction
You introduced the topic clearly and presented a thesis statement outlining what your essay will discuss. This helps set the direction for your essay.
task response
You addressed both parts of the question by discussing reasons for investing abroad and suggesting solutions, which shows a good understanding of the prompt.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perception of stability
  • diversify portfolios
  • political instability
  • transparency
  • currency appreciation
  • economic growth
  • investor confidence
  • business-friendly environment
  • legal framework
  • tax breaks
  • grants
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