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The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided data
of
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in
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 the pie
chart
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 illustrates the proportion of both
gender's
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genders's
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 arrested in Great Britain
for
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apply
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from 2015 to 220, and the bar
chart
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 demonstrates the motives of
these arrest
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this arrest
these arrests
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest index of reasons
of
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for
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 people's capture
were
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was
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 public intoxication, and after that
the
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apply
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drink
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drunk
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 driving. Meanwhile, the second
chart
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 shows that the percentage of
the
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apply
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men
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's
arrest
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arrests
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are
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is
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 bigger than women’s
one
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. As shown, the cause of both gender's capture were mostly public drinking and
drink
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drunk
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 driving, where the
men
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 took 30% in their bar, and
this
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 result is lower than women's 38% in the diagram. Meanwhile, the greatest percentage of individuals arrested in the UK
took
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the gentlemen, 32% of
pie
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the pie
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 in the
chart
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, and the ladies, who have the lowest proportion, 9% of captured guys. In conclusion, the data shows both public intoxication and
drink
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drunk
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 driving are the main reasons for catch in the UK, with
men
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, who were arrested more frequently than women.
Men
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 make up the largest portion of arrests,
while
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 women provide less percentage of those captured.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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