Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their freetime. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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people are becoming busy in their life.So, few

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people

believe that

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their

toddlers should utilise

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leisure

time

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group

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engagment

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engagement activities

activites

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while

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on the other

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hand

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some people prefer

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kids

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to have more personal space . Certainly,there are some of the key points responsible for their beliefs . My view and opinion

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elaborated in the following paragraphs.

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with,

group

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activities

helps

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to

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toddlers to socialise with other

kids

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and help them to construct skills like confidence,

co-operation

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and

acceptence

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acceptance

.

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,

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developing

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a

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good qualities in them as an individual will help them to develop

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personality.

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Although

,

kids

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develop good skills but

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the same

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time

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more personal space

help

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them to know about

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own spirit and about

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own

intresets

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interests

.To elaborate, Some children have

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sociological

condition

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and they enjoy

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there

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time

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alone by reading books or by performing several other

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activites

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activities

which are soul

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refreshing

for them but they are forced by their family members to engage in

group

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activites

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activities

which

may be

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are

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intollrent

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intolerant

intelligent

for them and can ruin there nature and habits of working.

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,

engagment

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engagement

can increase the spirit team

work

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teamwork

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.

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,

group

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activites

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activities

such

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as playing cricket

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together

to gather

or various other art

compititions

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competitions

provide more valuable

time

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to

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toddlers to work or

compit

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compete

in a

group

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.

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,they view all the challenges in a team and put there efforts.

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,other key features like

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competing

computing

,

problem solving

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and challenging

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skills

are produced in the brains of young

kids

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. But

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,

some times

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sometimes

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these

type

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of activites

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activites

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activities

can demoralise them.To illustrate,

some

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time

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kids

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are unsuccessful

to win

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in

the

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group

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activites

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activities

like a soccer match which will affect them

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mentally

.As a outcome,

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can have a feeling of

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jealousy

jealously

, demoralisation and anger.

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,

following

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were my views on

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rising predicament where several parents are

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agreed

to engage

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children in

group

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activites

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activities

and

other

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others

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want

there

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kids

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to enjoy personal space.

According to

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me participating in organised

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activites

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activities

more

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benificial

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beneficial

because it helps young guys to adapt

more

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valuable skills which will

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help them to live

thier

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their

life in

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way.