Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, an only offers practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that courses like medicine and IT engineering should be prioritized over
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subjects
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the increased university fees and
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unavailibility
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unavailability
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after graduating from those departments.
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statement because of the huge demands for those
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in the market and
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financial
advantages a nation can get from them. Supporting my agreement, I firmly believe that these days, every nation needs more doctors and IT
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to prevent their people from being affected by diseases and cyber attacks.
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, there are fewer
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in medical fields and IT sectors than each state needs,
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these are
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demanding and valuable
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everywhere, and these
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professionals
can
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manage
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sitting at their
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. Cyber security
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, as an example, mostly work from home after COVID-19
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pandemic
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, and
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of the immense shortages of workers in
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sector, employers do not force them to go to offices. Another viable reason why universities should prefer teaching practical courses is
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economic growth of a
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territory
. More precisely, as long as people are alive, they need proper treatments throughout their lives, and health sectors could make the most profit among any other sectors of a
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.
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, if a nation has sufficient medical
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and
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equipment
, it is able to save thousands of dollars per year preventing patients
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abroad for better treatments.
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, a report by Bangladesh Immigration Border reveals that the majority of
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wealthy families go
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overseas like Singapore and Thailand for their proper
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as the
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country
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does
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not equipped with all
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equipments
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and have specific
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in some fields.
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, if countries' third-level education providers prioritize creating
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to provide practical education like
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medicine
, it would assist a
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to be
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financially
strong in the long run. In conclusion,
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the aforementioned reasons, I
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in
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of the statement because studying
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practically
would assist getting better
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and make a
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wealthy enough.

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