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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The table presents data of graduates who are not involved in professional
occupation
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occupations
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. The
amount
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number
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 of
bachelor
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degrees
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 -it reached almost 30,000
people
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-
showed
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apply
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was bigger than postgraduate (around 2,725
people
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in
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with
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master
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master's
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degrees
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).
Overall
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, students
was
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apply
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always want to achieve a high level of school. The diagram shows
,
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apply
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 both
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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 and
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master
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master's
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degrees
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 were
having
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apply
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a
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apply
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interested in
further
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 study
instead
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 voluntary work
that
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which
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 had
lowest
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the lowest
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 total. In terms of
bachelor
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degrees
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, it showed a perfect interest in
high
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higher
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 education which reached
until
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apply
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29,665
people
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. Meanwhile for shift-time
job
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jobs
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 and unemployment, each other was slightly different (17,735 compared to 16,235).
In
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On
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 the other side, the
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master
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master's
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 degree showed
the
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a
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 similar
interesting
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interest
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with
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to
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 the
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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 view in
high-study
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the high-study
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 category that reached 2,725
people
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.
Furthermore
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, part-time
job
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jobs
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 and unemployment parts were less different, it
arround
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around
 210
people
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.
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Bachelor
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Bachelor's
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 and
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master
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master's
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degrees
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 had
lowest
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the lowest
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interested
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interest
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 in voluntary work.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bachelor, degrees, people, master with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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