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The map presents the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. k

The map presents the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. k
2 maps illustrate the development of the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 year.
Overall
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, there are several changes but visually there is no noticeable difference.
To begin
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 with , in 1995, there were 2 big ways which connected together perpendicularly. In the south, there was
sea
Correct article usage
a sea
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, on the left side, there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 5 shops on the top and 6 fish markets,
moreover
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, under it there was a fishing port. On the right side, there is a cafe and hotel. On the other road there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 houses across and on the east top there was a farmland, under which a forest park took place.
On the other hand
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,
instead
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 of fish
market
Fix the agreement mistake
markets
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 and shops now there are restaurants and apartments. Next to the hotel
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 park was added. Until today, only houses have been added and one road has
also
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 been built.
Finally
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 on the east side,
instead
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 of farmland and forest park a large area was distributed by golf and tennis.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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