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Many students around the world are not choosing science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What effects will this have on society?

In the prevailing era, the popularity of science
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 among learners is declining nowadays. The majority of students dislike
to choose
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 science
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subject
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 at their
suniversity
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university
. I believe that Commencing with the most salient reason
of
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 not selecting the science
subject
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 is that it is considered
as
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a difficult
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. Many students
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hesitate
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 to select it because they feel fear
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fail
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in
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it.
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, to get high marks and
purse
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carrier
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 in it, most of them need perseverance, dedication, and hard work.
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, poor teaching methods in schools
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this
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 boring. Some teachers teach it in
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 way
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 of
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practical
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.
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, undergraduate cannot develop their interest in the
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.
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, in India, a few learners select the
subject
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 for their tertiary degree
beacuse
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because
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 of practical work.

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coherence
Ensure clarity in your ideas by restructuring sentences for better flow. For example, rephrase 'the majority of students dislike to choose science subject at their suniversity' to 'many students are reluctant to choose science subjects at university'.
cohesion
Provide a clear conclusion summarizing the key points discussed in your essay. This will enhance the overall structure and help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
Consider giving examples that illustrate the broader impacts on society, rather than focusing solely on individual experiences, to strengthen your argument about the effects on society.
task achievement
You have identified relevant reasons for the decline in science subject enrollment, which is a key aspect of addressing the topic.
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Your use of specific examples, like the teaching methods in India, adds credibility to your arguments and demonstrates awareness of the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perceived difficulty
  • abstract concepts
  • inadequate teaching methods
  • qualified science teachers
  • higher perceived income
  • job security
  • undervaluation of science careers
  • technological advancement
  • innovation
  • shortage of skilled professionals
  • critical fields
  • healthcare
  • engineering
  • environmental science
  • economic implications
  • reduced competitiveness
  • global market
  • problem-solving capabilities
  • critical thinking skills
  • workforce
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