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In the past people used to live their entire life in one place. Nowadays they live in several different places during their life. What are the reasons for this change? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

The world become a small village with the aid of technology but it
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 become the foundation of several problems.
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 of them is changing residence
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 in the past people used to spend their life in
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place
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.I will discuss the reasons and impacts of
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change
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 in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with,some jobs like construction,mining,transportation and much more require workers to
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 their living locations
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 job sites.
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, a dump truck driver
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 to
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 cities crossponding his work.
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,some
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 skilled individuals hired by big multinational companies whose offices or warehouses are in almost every part of the nation
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 in the training of
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 workers.So, they often shift from
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place
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 to another as per the requirements.
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,In the past,humans
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 not have useless needs so they were happy living in the same
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 with
receiveing
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receiving
 a smaller amount of paycheck.
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,nowadays,people become so materialistic that they need massive
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 of cash to sustain their living
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standards
 which is
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 a vital concern
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in living
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 in several different places. in my opinion,
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,it is a bad trend because living in a new
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 after some time could be stressful,there are several individuals who can easily
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this
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change
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 but most
of
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humans
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the humans
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wants
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want
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 to live in
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place
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 for their entire life with their families and childhood memories.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to provide a more structured introduction that clearly outlines the main points you will cover in your essay. This will help guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to vary your sentence structure and use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing.
task achievement
In your conclusion, summarize your main points succinctly and provide a clearer final thought or recommendation.
task achievement
You have highlighted some relevant reasons for the trend of changing residences, such as job requirements and materialistic needs.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job mobility
  • career opportunities
  • relocate
  • advancements in transportation
  • diverse experiences
  • lifestyle changes
  • education pursuits
  • academic pursuits
  • economic factors
  • cost of living
  • housing affordability
  • migration decisions
  • personal relationships
  • family responsibilities
  • retirement
  • quality of life
  • desirable locations
  • globalization
  • social networks
  • remote work
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