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Band 2.5

Many people nowadays change career more frequently than ever before while others stick to a single job. What are the advantages and disadvantages of changing career?

Recently, Many employees
transfer
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 from their companies lots of times than before,
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 other people
stay
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 in the same
accupation
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accommodation
from
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for
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 years.
This
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 essay will
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clarify
 the benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, Many people changing their
job
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jobs
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 constantly, The main reason is opend a significant
opportonties
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opportunities
 for individual employees. because that
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 them expand the Realtionwork easily.
Additionaly
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lead
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 the person
have
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 high qualifications to get more
highly
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 positions.
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, Global companies are recruiting
workforce
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a workforce
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 who have many experiences.
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, There
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 people
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who maintian
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maintian
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maintain
 their work for many years. The
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primary
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that
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the workman
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to stay
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stay
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 in his comfort zone a
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long
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 term. Might be
afriad
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afraid
to lose
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of losing
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 his job and
can
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not
comfortable
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be comfortable
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 in
new
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a new
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 place.
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, They
not
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do not
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That
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mean
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 will
keep
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stay in the same area for life.
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,
person
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the person
a person
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 who
have
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 one job and
spend
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 his time in the same
comany
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company
 can not improve his skills well,
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which limit
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limit
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 association. In conclusion, Using chances means will
improved
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fastly
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 and make your high repetition,
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 staying
for
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in
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 one position
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for along
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along
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over
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period
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a period
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 will reduce the
opportinties
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opportunities
.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on improving your sentence structure for clarity. Avoid run-on sentences by breaking them into shorter, more manageable sentences. For example, the phrase 'Many people changing their job constantly, The main reason is opend a significant opportonties...' can be divided into clearer statements.
task achievement
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors, as they can distract from your message. For instance, 'opend' should be 'opened,' and 'accupation' should be 'occupation.' Proofreading your essay can help catch these mistakes.
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Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and supported with examples. While you have provided some examples, they could be more extensive to clearly illustrate your points. For instance, elaborating on how changing jobs can lead to better opportunities would strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You have identified the main advantages and disadvantages of changing careers, which shows that you understand the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay is clear, as you have distinct sections for the advantages and disadvantages, which helps in organizing your thoughts.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career transition
  • job satisfaction
  • income potential
  • network expansion
  • skill set diversification
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • job security
  • retraining cost
  • career progression
  • high-demand field
  • employment instability
  • professional development
  • industry experience
  • job market
  • employer perception
  • career ladder
  • commitment
  • reliability
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