You recently purchased a kitchen appliance, but it was delivered late and damaged. Write a letter to the store manager to complain about the issue. In your letter: - describe what item and problems - explain how the late and damaged delivery affected you, - state what you would like the store to do to resolve the problem.

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
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letter with huge disappointment with your delivery service and the product that I
purchase
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last
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week. I visited your store with the hope that I will
recieve
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receive
great service and product. To be more precise my good friend and coworker Jack recommended your location as he is your regular customer and
also
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told me that you guys
provides
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best
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the best
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service in the town. But I
begged
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to differ,
its
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it is
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because my air conditioner
supposed
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to get delivered
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weekend, which never
happend
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happened
happens
, I
recieved
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received
it on
tuesday
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.
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, the problem does not end
here
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there
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, the box was broken from the side and its missing hose pipe. Without
pipe
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i
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I
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could not use the product.
Its
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pick summer, my family need AC in
this
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hot weather.
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, I would like to suggest
few
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a few
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steps to resolve
this
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issue as soon as possible.
At
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first
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first,
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send your best worker
at
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to
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my address with
fresh
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a fresh
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piece of AC and make sure they are well aware of what are they doing
and
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apply
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also
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I would like to get
first
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the first
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few AC
maintainance
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maintenance
services for free as
a
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compensation
from
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for
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your
delership
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delivery
. Yours faithfully,

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general
Make sure to carefully proofread your letter for spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity.
coherence
Consider organizing your points more clearly in separate paragraphs, with each paragraph addressing a specific issue or request.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone when addressing the store and in your requests, avoiding colloquial language.
content
You effectively communicated your disappointment and the specific issues with the delivery and product.
content
You clearly outlined what you want the store to do to resolve the issue.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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