The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Assel 2

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Assel 2
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Assel 2
The three pie charts illustrate the mean proportions of sodium, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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in meals, which are unhealthy ingredients, consumed in the United States of America. It can be clearly seen that the sodium and saturated fat consumption accounted
the
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for the
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highest proportion for dinner,
while
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added
sugar
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contributed by far the highest proportion of ingredients for
snacks
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.
In addition
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, breakfast has the smallest
consumptions
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consumption
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of those three nutrients. Dinner had the highest salt and saturated fat, approximately 43% and 37%. Followed by lunch, which was
on
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in
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the second position of those two ingredients with 29% for salt consumption and 26% for saturated fat.
In contrast
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,
sugar
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consumption contributed only 23% for dinner and 19% for lunch.
On the other hand
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,
snacks
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was mainly
contains
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contain
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sugar
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, which regarded as the biggest ratio of almost
a
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apply
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half (approximately 42%) in American daily
snacks
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,
while
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sodium
has
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is
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only
one third
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one-third
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ingredient
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of ingredient
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found in
snacks
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compared to
the
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apply
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added
sugar
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. Breakfast,
in addition
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, has always remained the smallest proportion among all with only a bit more than
one tenth
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one-tenth
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of the ratio.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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