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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
The graph represents the
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commercial
commertial
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commercial
 rate of the
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crucial
crutial
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crucial
critical
 sort of fuel from 1981 to 2000
Overall
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, the
manafacturing
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manufacturing
 level of
steadly
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steady
 natural gas ended up higger than
thier
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their
 initial records, Coal experienced
the
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 nonsteady decrease. As far as the coal and natural gas remained almost
same
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the same
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 which was 80
million
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 and 40
respectivel
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respectively
 for
near
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nearly
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 2 years, Petroleum significantly increased to
aproximently
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prominently
 140
million
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 from 90
million
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.
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, after
that
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that,
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 the coal
droped
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dropped
 to just under
a
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apply
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39
million
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 within only one year. Meanwhile, the petroleum and the coal
was
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were
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 steady
untill
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until
 in 1986
former
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the former
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begun
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began
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 to decrease and
latter
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the latter
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countinuesly
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continued
 unchanged till 1990.
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, the coal jumped to nearly 60
million
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 in 1986.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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