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Band 4.5

You have just returned from a holiday. You are unhappy with the quality of the hotel you stayed in and want to complain to the travel agency that arranged the holiday. Write a letter to the manager of the travel agency. In your letter, •say about the holiday and where you stayed •mention why you are unhappy about the hotel where you stayed •say what you would like the travel agency to do

Dear Sir/Madam,
Last
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 week I
have
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joined your travel to Bali, Indonesia for 5 nights and 6 days.
I
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I am
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really happy with the routes, schedules and restaurants that I visited or tried.
However
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, I am totally unhappy with the choice of your
accomoations
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accommodation
accommodations
. For the whole trip
in
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total
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i
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I
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 stayed in two different hotels. I was amazed by the view and facilities I got from the first
hotel
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.
However
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, I was totally unhappy with the second
hotel
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. The
hotel
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 is Horizon
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hotel
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, located in Ubud, Bali. To be honest, I expected to have
a
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an
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 ocean view from my
room
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.
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, my
room
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is not even have
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 a window. I could not see
anyview
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any view
 from my
room
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, and no circulation at all. I am really disappointed with
this
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. I hope next time, you
could
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 select
better
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a better
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hotel
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 and try to contact the
hotel
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 to provide the guest better
room
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.
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, we could enjoy our holiday. Thank you for your time. Your
sincerly
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sincerely
, Jessi

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tone
Consider making your closing more formal, such as using 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully' depending on your relationship with the recipient.
grammar
Make sure to check for minor grammatical inaccuracies and ensure clarity in your message, such as using 'the accommodations' instead of 'the accomoations'.
content
You provided specific details about your holiday and expressed your dissatisfaction clearly.
structure
The overall structure of your letter is clear, which helps in understanding your main points.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Subpar accommodations
  • Customer satisfaction
  • Discrepancy in service
  • Unhygienic conditions
  • Lackluster amenities
  • Inattentive staff
  • Compensation
  • Unresolved issues
  • Misleading advertising
  • Formal grievance
  • Prompt resolution
  • Travel experience
  • Constructive feedback
  • Remedial action
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