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The graphs below show the primary social networking websites of British users in 2010 and projected figures for 2018.

The graphs below show the primary social networking websites of British users in 2010 and projected figures for 2018.
The pie charts demonstrate the five main social media applications that
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 by British people in 2010 and
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 number in 2018.
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, Facebook had the biggest proportion of British users in 2010 and
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 to grow even more in the future.
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, Twitter will remain the number the number of users in 2018 with a slight decline. The others will nearly diminish. In 2010 Facebook made up nearly half of the total
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 around %46 and it is predicted to have a huge climb to reach almost
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 of the total in 2018 at around %72. The next biggest website was Twitter at approximately %18 in 2010 and it is estimated to remain the percentage with
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 unconsidered fall at relatively %17, with only
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1 drop. Pinterest experienced the biggest diminish with
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 %10 fall, from %17 in 2010 to %7 in 2018.
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, Google Plus almost reduced completely in 2018 with slightly less than %3, after
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 %10.42 users
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 British. The most considerable feature in
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graphs
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 is that Bebo literally
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 in 2018 with %0, it
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represented
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 %8.17 of the total in 2010 .

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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