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The graph below shows the percentage of part- time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of part- time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
THE BAR CHART PROVIDES KEY INFORMATION ABOUT THE PERCENTAGE OF PART-TIME WORKERS IN EACH
REGIONS
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REGION
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 OF THE UK DURING 1980 AND 2010. THE UNITS ARE MEASURED IN PERCENTAGES.
OVERALL
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, IT IS
CLEARFROM
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CLEAR FROM
 THE GRAPH THAT WALES IS THE HIGHEST RATE OF PART-TIME EMPLOYEES.
IN ADDITION
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, IN 1980
ITS
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IT
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 GENERALLY
LOWER
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A LOWER
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 RATE EXCEPT
NORTHERN
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IN NORTHERN
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 IRELAND,
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 IN 2010 IT IS
OPPOSITE
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THE OPPOSITE
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WICH
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WHICH
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 MEANS THAT IT IS HIGHER.
ACCORDING TO
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 WHAT IS SHOWN,... IN TERMS OF,...

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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