1. Write a letter to local authorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. - Mention about the current sport facilities available - What kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced. How the new sports facilities would be a help for the people in your age group.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to request
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another ground which can be used as a playing area for young
people
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. The current indoor stadium is usually occupied by children and elderly
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leaving no time for working professionals to use the space for any activities in the evenings. It would be great to have an open space which can be a
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ground and have a basic gym at a corner.
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ground could be used for festivals,
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gatherings and morning
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Due to
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the recent change in the working style of
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more and more individuals are either completely working from home or have a remote working style. It is becoming very critical to fight the
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and other illnesses caused by
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space would give some opportunity for
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workout
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and fight these critical health challenges. I look forward
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your kind consideration in
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regard. Yours faithfully, Narender Singh

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Task Achievement
Consider providing specific examples of activities that could take place in the proposed sports facilities to enhance your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a clear structure by starting each paragraph with a topic sentence that summarizes its content, and try to group related ideas together.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to check grammar and phrasing for clarity, such as changing 'an another ground' to 'another ground'.
Positive Writing Tone
The letter has a clear and polite request, which sets a positive tone.
Content Awareness
You highlighted the importance of physical activity recognition, showing awareness of health issues relevant to your audience.
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