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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Islip town centre now Countryside Shops Main road Shops Housing E Park School Housing Islip town centre: planned development W E Dual-» carriageway Bus Shopping Car station centre park Pedestrians only Shops Housing New housing New housing Park School Housing PA

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Islip town centre now Countryside Shops Main road Shops Housing E Park School Housing Islip town centre: planned development W E Dual-» carriageway Bus Shopping Car station centre park Pedestrians only Shops Housing New housing New housing Park School Housing PA
The map below
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the centre of
small
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a small
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town
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 called Islip and the planned changes between Isllip
town
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 and the planned development that will change the
town
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 .
overall
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 ,
it is clear that
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,
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apply
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there is a
genral
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general
 trend of changes and
devlopment
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development
the
town
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 will
on
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in
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future
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the future
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moreover
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 there
is
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are
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 a lot of centers and administration that will include the city in the planned advancement
plane
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plan
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. looking at to planned development of the
town
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 it is easy to figure out the changes
moreover
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 the significant change is the street it surrounds the city from all sections.
In addition
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,
school
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the school
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 and
park
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the park
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 stay in the same place , it
is become
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becomes
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 two places to
shopped
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shop
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 provided with car parks and from the west
thereis
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there is
abuses
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abuse
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 station for school student ,moved to the east of the car park there is a new area for a new house to make
their
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they're
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 arrive to school or shoop centre easily,
however
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 south of the
town
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 there is more area for a new house .
To sum up
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 , planned advancement will make a huge difference in the
town
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 and make everything easy to arrive and approach
also
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 the percentage of people in that
town
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 will increase because of the new areas of new houses.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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