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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about the various
levels
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 of post-school qualifications in Australia and the percentages of
males
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 and females who held them in 1999. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that men had the best numbers in different
levels
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 except for
Undergraduate
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the Undergraduate
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diploma
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.
In addition
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,
women
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 were pursuing a significantly higher level to get an Undergraduate
diploma
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,
whereas
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 in Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 was decreasing to get that degree.
According to
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 what is shown, a Bachelor's degree was a smaller
rate
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 for
women
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 around 50% and for
males
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 roughly 55%.
Moreover
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, the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 had shown a higher
rate
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 of men around 90%,
in contrast
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 to
women
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, who were acquiring around 10%. There was a big difference between the qualification
levels
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. In terms of master's degrees,
males
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 had a better
rate
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 compared to
women
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 around 60%,
while
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 for female students around half of
males
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. Australia has shown a significant
rate
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 of men in all
levels
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 of academic certificates.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, males, diploma, women, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • qualification
  • higher education
  • vocational training
  • Bachelor's degree
  • diploma
  • gender disparity
  • employment
  • statistics
  • representation
  • trend
  • data analysis
  • implication
  • education attainment
  • demographics
  • chart overview
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