The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates
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a few
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changes
about
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proportion
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the proportion
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of society were born in
Australia
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and outside
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were
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who were
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living in
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the countryside
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from 1995 to 2010.
overall
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, it is clearly seen that most
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who
living
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in the cities from 1995 to 2010 still high. In
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contrast,
people
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who
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in towns and rural areas have been decreased between 1995 and 2010. In terms of
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born in
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just under 50 %
then
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people
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who
living
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in
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outside
Australia
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in 1995 which was around 60 per cent. Despite
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,
People
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who were born in town around 20 % had been fell from
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who born outside
Australia
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around 10. Comparison of Rural areas have growth over 20 to 40 in 1995. In 2010, bar charts show there was not
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proportion of
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born
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Australia
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in Australia
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just under 20.
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,
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who
living
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in towns and rural areas
have been
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droped
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dropped
approximately
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by approximately
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10 % that
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born outside
Australia
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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