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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key evidence about the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in Australia, New Zealand, the UK and the US in 2003 and 2006 and the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in these countries in 2006. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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. It is clear from the graph that the
number
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 of
people
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 in Australia reached 152,000 in 2003. After that,
it is clear that
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 in 2006 increased double and came to 219,000. When looking at the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in 2006, Australia was represented 10.7.
According to
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 what is shown New Zealand had the lowest
number
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 of
workers
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 in 2003 approximately 65,000.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of
workers
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 in 2006
also
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 a small
number
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 employ comparing with other countries
rose
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 slightly to 87,000.
On the other hand
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, in 2003, the
number
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 of temporary
employee
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employees
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 in the UK arrived at 137,000. In 2006 we showed nearly growth and came to 266,000. As we see the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in 2006, New Zealand was illustrated 21.1, and the UK showed 4.4. In terms of the United States in 2003, had the highest
number
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 of temporary
workers
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 in 2003 nearly 577,000.
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, in 2006, the US had the largest
number
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 of
workers
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 as what clarified accounted for 678,000. that in 2006 increased double and came to 219,000. In the end, we can see the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in 2006, the US 2.3.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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