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The pie chart below shows the proportions of leading online travel companies worldwide. December 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the proportions of leading online travel companies worldwide. December 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the percentages of
companies
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 that have
leading
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a leading
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 position in online
travel
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 around the world in December 2022.
Overall
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, it can be witnessed that most of the leading online
travel
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companies
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 are from
United
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the United
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 States, which can reach
to
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apply
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84% of
whole
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the whole
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 market share in December 2022. At the same time, the proportion of
company
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companies
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 in China
also
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 got 12% at that time. To be precise, the
percentages
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percentage
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 of
companies
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 leading online
travel
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among
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in
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 the world as Booking.com in
USA
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the USA
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 was the highest, at 45%.
Additionally
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, the proportion of
companies
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as
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such as
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 Airbnb and Expedia together was 39%, approximately had
same
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the same
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 market share
cpmpared
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compared
 with Booking.com as the biggest one.
Furthermore
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, the percentages of other
companies
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 leading online
travel
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 worldwide
was
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were
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 in
smallest
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the smallest
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 occupation, which
was only have
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only had
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 the number of 4
percent
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per cent
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words companies, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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