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The pie chart below shows the proportions of leading online travel companies worldwide. December 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the proportions of leading online travel companies worldwide. December 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart below demonstrates the percentages of the leading online travel companies around the world. In the period year 2022 of December.
It is clear that
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 the companies (Booking.
com
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 and Airbnb), are the two most popular websites for people to book their travelling needs, Both of which are American based. Where
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 Booking.
com
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 almost took over half of the market share. Booking.
com
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 website has the highest
users
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 percentage with 45%.
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 Airbnb held the
second highest
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 users percentage with 31%.
This
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, means together they make two-thirds of the most profitable American travelling websites in December 2022.
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 the rest of the travel companies (Trip.
com
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, Expedia and others), Held the lowest share of the worldwide leading online travel websites with only 12% for Trip.
com
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 which is the only website
that is
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 China-based. And
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% share held for the Expedia website.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words com with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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