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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The six pie charts provide key information about the
used
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 of
water
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 in six different regions of the world. The units are measured by percentage. It is clear from the graph that four of the areas are spending
water
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in
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Agricultural
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agriculture
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.
In addition
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,
the
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industrial use comes second for almost
the
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 regions.
Whereas
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, the majority of the countries spend less
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water
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 in Domestic.
According to
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 what is
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,
that
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Africa, both side of Asia and South
America
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 spend
the
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the
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majority of their
water
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in
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 Agricultural with nearly
above
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70
percent
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per cent
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.
However
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,
North
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in North
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America
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 and Europe the
water
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 used
decline
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significant compare
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 to other regions In terms of industrial and Domestic, North
America
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 and Europe they spend more
water
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 in industrial with nearly above 45, on
other
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 hand, Africa, both
side
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 of Asia and South
America
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 spend less
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then
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 13 per cent. For Domestic, North
America
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 and Europe have 15 per cent of the shear , and other countries spend low
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 that

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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