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The graph below shows the daily water consumption for Americans in their homes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

The graph below shows the daily water consumption for Americans in their homes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
The chart illustrates the average
water
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uses
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use
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 by Americans in their household so for various activities, with and without the application of
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water saving
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water-saving
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 technologies.
Overall
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, the data depicts that
use
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the use
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 of various
water
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conservation
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 methods can help
reducing
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reduce
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a
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the
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 significant
amount
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 of
water
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 used in homes. The highest
amount
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 of
water
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 consumption is for
a
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apply
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flushing a toilet,
that is
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it
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apply
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20
gallons
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 of
water
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.
In contrast
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,
to
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apply
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that
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when
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 washing dishes why
a
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does a
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dish washer
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dishwasher
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 consumes released
specificly
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specifically
 only one gallon
.
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?
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 Without using
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conservation
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the conservation
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 method,
and
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apply
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American uses
certain
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a certain
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amount
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 of
water
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 for daily chores. washing clothes and taking showers
amount
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for
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to
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 15
gallons
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 and 13
gallons
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 per day, respectively. There is substantial use of
water
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 for facets
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that
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apply
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is only 11
gallons
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 a day 2 units are used for other purposes and please
to
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apply
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water
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 is consumed for washing dishes in a dishwasher.
On the other hand
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, if the natives use
water
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-saving technologies, they can
a
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apply
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reduce
the
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apply
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water
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 consumption to a greater extent. Almost half of the
water
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 citizens can be reduced in toilets. There is
decline
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a decline
the decline
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 in
water
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uses
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use
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 after employing
to
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apply
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water
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-
conservation
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 methods in and listed activities for taking a shower only 10
gallons
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 can be used by
and
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an
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 individual and
their
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there
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 is a decline of nearly 5
day
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days
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 for washing clothes.
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 leaks can save around 5 units of
a
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apply
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water
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 if
a
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apply
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maintained adequately using force
its
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apply
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watching diseases and other tasks has no effect after implementing
a
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conservation methods
a conservation method
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conservation
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 methods. In conclusion,
water
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conservation
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 status
is
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apply
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can
a
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apply
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significantly minimise daily
water
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uses
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use
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 in American
household
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households
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 across
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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domestic
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of domestic
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 taskers
which
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who
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 require
water
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, conservation, amount, gallons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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