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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a univer¬sity should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own know¬ledge or experience.

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Introduction
What
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skills
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 should
universities
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 provide has been argued for many years. Some people think that the true function of
universities
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 provide
knowledge
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 for their own purpose, but nowadays, more and more people point out that
universities
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 should
pro¬vide
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provide
 graduates with the
knowledge
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 and
skills
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according to
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 the
workplace
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.
Body paragraph 1
The first reason for
universities
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 should provide
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and
skill
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skills
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 is the
students
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’ needs. Obviously,
the
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most of the
students
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 go to
university
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of
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purpose
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the purpose
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 of
is to get
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getting
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 some
knowledge
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 and
skills
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 which could
make
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give
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 them
have
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apply
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the ability to get a job. If a
university
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 does not provide
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and
skills
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, the
students
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 might not get a job and they would be very disappointed.
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, the
university
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 would lose its
students
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Body paragraph 2
Moreover
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, providing
knowledge
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 and
skills
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 needed in the
workplace
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 makes a
university
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 progress.
The new
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skills
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 and information always are initiated in the
workplace
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, so
focus¬ing
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focusing
 on the needs of the
workplace
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 the
university
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 could get sound strategies to do research and make it more
mordenization
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modernization
.
Body paragraph 3
Lastly
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, providing
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and
sills
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skills
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 could benefit our country which usually gives
a
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apply
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financial support to
universities
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. Having
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and
skills
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,
students
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 are more easy to get a job, and
this
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 can make our
countries’
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country’s
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 economy strong.
Conclusion
In conclusion, it can be said that providing the
knowledge
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 and
skills
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 which the
workplace
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 needs is every
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universities’
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university’
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 basic function.

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introduction
Make sure your introduction is clear and states your opinion directly. The last sentence can be improved to better preview the main points.
main points
When presenting reasons, try to use clearer examples and explanations. Adding specific examples would make your arguments stronger.
grammar
Review your essay for grammar and spelling mistakes. For example, use 'skills' instead of 'sills' and 'modernization' instead of 'mordenization'.
coherence
Use linking words to help connect your ideas. Words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' can help improve the flow of your essay.
positive
You clearly express your opinion on the role of universities in your introduction.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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