The graph compares employement rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph compares employement rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph compares employement rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart depicts the percentage of people who worked in three different areas of the economy in the UK in a ten-
year
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period
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from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that there were increasing patterns in both the public
sector
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and self-employed. Another interesting point is that the private
sector
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recorded the highest rate in the initial
year
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, but saw a downward pattern, making it the lowest in the
last
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year
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. Looking at the details, the public
sector
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began at just below 40% in 2000. Having remained stable for 3 years, the
number
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increased significantly to nearly 50% in 2005. Despite the considerable decrease in 2006, the
number
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increased gradually to the end of the
period
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, placing it in first position.
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, the self-employed started as the lowest
number
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at around 18%. at which point it fluctuated slightly over the first half of the
period
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, before growing sharply to its highest point at approximately 30%
at the end
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of the
period
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.
By contrast
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, the private
sector
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was observed as the highest
number
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, accounting for 48% in the initial
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. The
number
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then
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dropped strikingly, reaching 20% in the final
year
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, making it finish in the
last
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position.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, sector, year, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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