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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995–2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995–2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates and provides key information about the
number
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 of
minutes
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 of telephone calls in the UK between 1995 and 2002. The data is expressed as
numbers
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that all call types experienced growth.
In addition
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, the local fixed line had the biggest
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,
whereas
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 mobile
minuets
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minutes
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 remained the lowest.
According to
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 what is shown, the fixed line had the highest
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 of
minutes
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, which started at around 71 billion and surged up to 90 in 1999. But a noticeable fall is noticed in 2002 to around 71
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. National and international started at a steady
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 of about 35 in 1995 and
then
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 jumped to around 60 over the remaining period. The sector of mobiles had the lowest
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, with only 5 in 1995. A noticeable rise occurred in 2002 to around 45 billion
minutes
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. The graph highlights a clear trend
of
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 the total
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 of
minutes
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 used in the UK telephones among 3 categories. The local line,
in particular
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, stood out with a significantly highest rate,
while
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 the mobile remained the lowest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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