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Band 5.5

A college asked its graduates to give a speech to current students about their professional careers and future opportunities. You would like to participate. Write a letter and say What do you want to talk about? Why do you think students will be interested in it Suggest a suitable date and time for your speech.

Dear Sir or Madam, I learned that our university provides graduates with the opportunity to speak about career prospects and
opportunity
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 regarding their profession. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my keen interest in participating and encouraging students through my
speech
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. First of all, I would appreciate our university
to provide
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 in-depth knowledge about
chosen
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 field in my
speech
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.
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, I would like to aware them
about
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 consciousness related to future goals, how to achieve them and how to handle them professionally.
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, my own experiences and hard work would be covered, and they are allowed to ask questions. In my opinion, students are observed to attend
career related
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 seminars and sessions, so they must take
interest
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 in
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speech
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.
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, they are open to ask questions which may attract them toward
speech
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. At
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, I would like to discuss my availability and contact details.The
speech
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 can be arranged on 10th June 2025 in the evening
around
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 5:30 PM to 6:30 PM and I can be reached at 123 or via e-mail at XYZ if you need any details. Hoping to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, XYZ.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to keep a clear structure. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea only.
task achievement
Try to use a more formal tone in your speech. This will make it more suitable for a college setting.
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Add a brief introduction about yourself to connect better with the audience.
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You clearly stated your interest in giving the speech and outlined your main topics well.
coherence and cohesion
The closing was polite, which is good for a formal letter.
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