T1 You have noticed a problem in a public park near your home. You decide to write to the park manager about this problem. - say how often you visit the park - ⁠describe the problem that you have noticed - ⁠suggest a possible solution to this problem You do not need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Madam, I am writing
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email to bring to your attention an issue that I recently noticed in the Public
Park
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near
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my home. It has become part of my daily ritual to walk in the
park
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every day after my work hours. Occasionally, I
also
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bring my
children
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to the
park
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as well. I and my
children
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really enjoy spending quality time in the
park
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as a family.
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, recently I have developed some issues concerning the
safety
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of the
children
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in the
park
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. Most of the swings and rides are worn out which has become
major
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stress factor
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many parents including myself for their
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children
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children's
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safety
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in
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park
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the park
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.
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, the playground surface is not appropriate
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the
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children
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safety
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standards. The uneven and rough surface can pose tripping hazards.
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, I would like to suggest that the playground equipment must be inspected and repaired
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. To reduce the injuries among the
children
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soft bedding
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as rubber flooring done under the playground area can enhance the
safety
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aspects in the
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. Thank you for your attention on
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matter. I hope to see the necessary improvements done for the
safety
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and enjoyment of all visitors of the
park
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. Yours faithfully, ABC

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas more clearly by using paragraphs effectively. This will help the reader understand your points better.
task achievement
Use clearer sentences to explain your suggestions. Simplicity can make your ideas stronger.
task achievement
You provided a clear description of the problem and suggested a solution, which is good for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and closing are polite and appropriate, reflecting a good writing tone.
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