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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram demonstrates
us
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 how electricity is generated by using
hydroelectric
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a hydroelectric
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 power
station
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.
Overall
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, the dam
collect
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collects
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water
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 that comes from
river
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the river
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 and gates transfer
this
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water
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 to low-level reservoirs.
While
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 the
water
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 is transferring, the flow of
water
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 turns
reversible
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 turbines and it creates electric energy. First of all, the intake opens during the day and
water
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move
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moves
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 from
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
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 to
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a low
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low level
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low-level
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reservoir
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 and
this
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 flow of
water
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generate
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generates
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 electricity by turning reversible turbines in
power
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a power
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station
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. After the turning,
electric
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electricity
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 transfers to
generator
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the generator
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 and electric stores in it for going to
national
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the national
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 grid. At night, the working system of
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station
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the station
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 has been changing.
Water
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 has been pumping from
low-level
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the low-level
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reservoir
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 to
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
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 and the direction of
flow
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the flow
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 of
water
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 has been changing.
Power
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The power
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station
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 transfers
water
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 into
high-level
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the high-level
a high-level
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reservoir
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.
Also
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, the intake of
dam
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the dam
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 is closed during the night.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words station, water, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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