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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart and table illustrate data about
population
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 numbers in Japan, as shown in the chart and the table below.
Overall
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, the chart compares different categories (in millions and percentages) of Japan's
population
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 in the past , present and future years.
However
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, the most recent data shows that the highest number is less than half.
Firstly
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, in 1950 the percentage of the
population
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 was lower than the rest of the
population
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 in the other years at 4.9 per cent per year and 4.1 in a
million
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.
Secondly
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, by 2005, there was a significant rise in both the total
population
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 and the number of people aged over 65. The
population
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 reached its peak at 127.8
million
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,
while
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 the elderly
population
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 rose to 25.7
million
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, accounting for 20% of the total. In the future, the
population
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 of Japan is expected to decline steadily. By 2035, the total
population
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 is projected to fall to 110
million
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, and
further
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 down to 89.9
million
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 by 2055. Despite
this
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 decline, the percentage of people aged 65 and over is expected to increase dramatically. In 2035,
this
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 group will represent 34% of the total
population
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, and by 2055, it will rise to 41%, even though the actual number will slightly decrease to 36.5
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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