The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages
The line graph
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demonstrates the birth
rate
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, population growth and percentages of deaths between 1940 and 2020 in Scotland
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, the amount of the birth and death
rate
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are
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decreased dramatically throughout the given period The birth
rate
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were fluctuating
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between 1940 and 1955 even though it dramatically decreased
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death rates declined between 1940 and 1955
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it
was fluctuating
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fluctuated
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tell 2020 The population growth
rate
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decreased from 1940 to 1945 and
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it increased sharply after that it was increased in general

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth rate
  • percentage
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • stabilize
  • demographic
  • interrelate
  • historical events
  • social policies
  • economic conditions
  • healthcare advancements
  • variable
  • measured
  • decade
  • significant
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