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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph given illustrates the amounts of products which were sent by various methods of transport in the UK between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
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, in these 28 years, road transport brought the highest amount of goods,
while
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 pipeline transport sent the least amounts of products.
Initially
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, it can be seen that in 1974 road transported goods at approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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.
In between
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 1990 and 1994,
this
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 figure reached its first
peak
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around
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of around
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 80
million
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tonnes
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.
Then
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, it
obtained
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reached
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 its highest
peak
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 in 2002 with almost 100
million
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tonnes
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. The water method obtained second place,
which
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in 1974, it transported less than 40
million
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tonnes
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.
Then
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, it reached its first
peak
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 in 1982 around 58
million
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tonnes
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. It achieved its next
peak
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 in 2002 more than 60
million
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tonnes
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For the
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last
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 position of methods of transportation was pipeline. It began around 5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974. In the next years, it grew and reached its first
peak
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 in 1982 around 19
million
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tonnes
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. Afterwards, it reached its second
peak
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in
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between 1994 and 1998 slightly above 20
million
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tonnes
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. Comparatively, the rail was the only method which had fluctuated quantities in 2 decades between 1978 and 1998.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes, peak with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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