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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph and pie chart provide key data about the number of
books
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 that were borrowed from village libraries which are West Eston,Sutton Wood,Church Mount, and Ryeslip in 2014, and types of
Books
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 . The units are measured in percentages and numbers.
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, it is clear from the graph that Sutton Wood had a huge amount of
books
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 that were borrowed in August.
In addition
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, science and history were equal percentages,
whereas
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, self-help was the lowest ratio among all the
books
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.
According to
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 what is shown
Ryeslip
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by Ryeslip
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, gradually decreased until reached nearly 160
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 in September, West Eston had the lowest amount of
books
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 in June around 50, and increased to almost 150
books
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 in August.
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, Sutton Wood had the largest number of
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 around 500 in September. In terms of types of
Books
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 Borrowed from the library, fiction had the biggest figure 46%, and self-help had the minimal figure at 10%.
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, history and science had around 14%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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