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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. 📊 Estimated World Illiteracy Rates, by Region and Gender, 2000 [Bar chart with regions: Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia — with two bars for each: Male and Female]

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. 📊 Estimated World Illiteracy Rates, by Region and Gender, 2000 [Bar chart with regions: Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia — with two bars for each: Male and Female]
The bar chart compares the percentage of estimated world illiteracy by sex in six country regions in 2000.
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 had the highest number in the parts of illiteracy in all given regions. South Asia recorded the highest figure of uneducated
women
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 with about 54%, followed by Arab states with around 53%. Compared to men who
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 to write and read, South Asia had the greatest rate
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 32%, followed by Sub-Saharan Africa with exactly 30%,
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 the number of illiteracy
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 49% in the same region. The percentage of
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significantly
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 higher than
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 men with 20%, and approximately 47% respectively. The proportion in Latin America/Caribbean was almost the same in both
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males
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 and
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females
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 with 10%.
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 to developed countries with 1%
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 uneducated
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 and
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under 1%
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 men. Which
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 it the lowest rate
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 all countries.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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