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Band 4

You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ................. , There are three main things to consider before writing your essay: 1. Tone (formal or informal) Sometimes students are friendly with their tutors, but I think it would be better to write a formal letter. Start with your tutor’s surname (e.g. Dear Mr. Smith,) and end with “Yours sincerely,”. Avoid contractions (write “I am” instead of “I’m”), and avoid using informal idioms or expressions. Be polite rather than friendly. 2. Purpose The main purpose of this letter is to inform your tutor that you are leaving the course. Make this clear straight away (e.g. I am writing to inform you that...). Then cover the three points, writing a short paragraph for each. 3. Ideas I recommend spending a few minutes planning ideas for each of the task points before you start writing. You need to decide what the evening course is about, what your full-time job is, a reason why you are too busy with work to continue with the course, and whether you want to leave completely or perhaps continue at a later date.

Dear Mr Sanwani Thank you for your best
course
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of
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in
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 learning
english
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English
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because
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and because
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 of
this
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i
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I
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 am able to speak
in
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apply
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english
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 fluently, I know it is difficult to tell you,
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but unfortunetly
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unfortunetly
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unfortunately
i
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I
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 have to do my
full time
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full-time
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 job because my manager didn't permit me to join
in
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apply
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your
course
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 anymore
due to
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 a lot of customers that
i
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I
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 have to serve in
this
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 year.
i
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I
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 know
this
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course
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really
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 important for me in
this
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 era, but because
of
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my job
required
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 me to enter
to
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the office from 08.00 am until 07.00 pm every week without
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a holiyday
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holiyday
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holiday
holidays
.
i
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I
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 don't really have much time to continue
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course
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 because
i
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I
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 am too tired if I directly learn
english
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 in the evening because my energy has run out. Not only that if I stubborn to do it, my focus will decrease and it is will affect my
perfomance
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performance
 at work
and
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apply
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that why my manager
ask
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asked
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 me to stop
this
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course
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 until the peak of my
customers
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customer's
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 back to normal. it is very risky, it is not
imposibble
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impossible
 that my manager will fire me because
it's
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affect
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 the profit and margin in my office. so
i
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 hope that you will understand the situation it is for my secure job. thank you

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task achievement
Start with a clear introduction stating the purpose of the letter.
coherence
Organize your thoughts into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one main idea.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone; avoid phrases like 'unfortunately' at the beginning of sentences without proper context.
coherence
Ensure each paragraph flows logically into the next to improve coherence.
positive
You express gratitude for the course clearly, which shows politeness.
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You explain your situation with your job, which gives context to your letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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