The line graph shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The line graph shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
The line graph illustrates how many overseas visitors came to the
UK
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for three major purposes - holidays, business and visiting friends or relatives from 1989 to 2009. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that holiday was the most popular reason for
visting
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visiting
the
UK
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throughout the period despite some fluctuations,
while
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the remaining purposes showed a
stready
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steady
rise. In 1989, about 7
million
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visitors came to the
UK
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for holidays, which
nearly
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twice the figure for seeing friends or relatives (3.5
million
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) and
significant
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higher than that
of
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apply
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for business. Holidays peaked at roughly 9
million
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in 1999, after which it declined to 7.5
million
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in 2004, before ending the period at 8.5
million
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visitors. In
addtion
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addition
, the number of people
went
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who went
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to the
UK
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on business trips fluctuated in the range of 4
million
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in 1993 to 8
million
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in 2009.
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,
visiting
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visits
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to friends or relatives underwent a steady upward trend, reaching around 6.5
million
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at the end
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of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • overseas visitors
  • UK
  • purposes
  • 1989
  • 2009
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • visits
  • leisure
  • business
  • education
  • tourism
  • growth
  • stable
  • consistent
  • international
  • students
  • preferences
  • trend
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