The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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table chart displays data about the proportion of the workforce employed in six different industries in Australia over a period of 20 years, starting from 1989.
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, it is evident that manufacturing saw a significant decrease and retail fields experienced a fall over the period,
whereas
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, there was a slight rise in the other four categories, namely, health care, construction, education and tourism sectors. In terms of manufacturing, the percentage of it went down considerably from 15% in 1989 to just under 10% in 2009.
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it was the highest professional sector in 1989, it placed third
at the end
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of the period. Even though retail witnessed a steady fall of just .3%, it was still the second highest in 2009 among all other employment categories. It is
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noticeable that the figure for tourism workers saw the
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increase of around 2%
at the end
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of the time span.
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, the percentage of healthcare workers took place in the first position in 2009 with 11.3%,
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both construction and education followed the same trend of going up with just .7% .

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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