The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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the percentages of males and females from 60 to 64 years old employed in four different nations in 1970 and 2000.
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, the population of elderly men working in all four countries decreased over the given period,
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the population of elderly women employed increased in Australia and the USA. Japan had the highest percentage of working older adults during the given period,
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had the least for women in both years and men in 2000. With regard to the mature male employees, Japan had the highest percentage
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in both years, with 84% in 1970 and a slight decrease of 8% in 2000.
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, Belgium was the second highest, with 79% in 1970 but plummeted to a quarter of itself in 2000.
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, in 1970, the percentage of senior workers in Australia and the USA ranged from 70-75% but fell moderately to about 45-55% in 2000. regarding the elderly women workers, Japan and Belgium both experienced a slow decline from 43% and 8% in 1970 to 40% and 7% in 2000, respectively.
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in 2000, the USA and Australia slightly rose by 2% and 1% from their initial figures of 36% and 18%, respectively in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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