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You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter: • introduce yourself say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs Begin as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

dear
maneger
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manager
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 have started
a
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abc
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 college but
this
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 college has no
sports
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 facilities of its own.
i
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 did not know you did not have a
sports
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 club to be honest,
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 was very excited to start
abc university
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ABC University
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.
i
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 have been
exercise
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exercising
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fo
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for
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 a long time.
i
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 was searching for a
sports
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 club nearby
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 find your
sports
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 club , if you accept members from outside ,
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would
woud
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would
 like to come
to begin
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 a
memeber
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member
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 wanted to write to you because
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 like your clubs and nearby me
i
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 hope you get back to me as soon as possible because
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I'm
im
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I have
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 not
do
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done
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exercise
exerside
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exercise for
forr
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for
 a long time makes me tired Hung

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Grammar and Spelling
Make sure to use proper spelling and grammar. For example, 'manager' instead of 'maneger', 'would' instead of 'woud'.
Coherence
Try to organize your ideas better. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
Tone and Formality
Use a proper closing for your letter, such as 'Sincerely' or 'Best regards'.
Positive Attitude
Your enthusiasm for joining a sports club is clear, which is great!

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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