The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
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information about total world
energy
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consumption
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and
electricity
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production
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for
last
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year. After analysing the pie charts, it can be seen clearly that a negligible difference was seen
in
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the
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gas
energy
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consumption
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and
electricity
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generation.
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,
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energy
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consumption
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of coal was 25.1
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percent
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while
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it
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increased by 19.9
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percent
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. The
energy
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usage of nuclear was 6.5
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percent
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but
electricity
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production
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of it is 15.7
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.
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, the pie charts show that
,
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the generation of oil was only 6.7
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while
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the ratio of
energy
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consumption
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increased to 34.3
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. The
hydro fuel
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hydrofuel
production
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was 16.1
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percent
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,
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however
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usage of it is only 2.2
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. The percentage of combustible renewables and waste
energy
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consumption
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was 10.6
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percent
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.
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, the
higest
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highest
consumption
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and
production
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of fuel was coal and gas. Other resources
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2.1
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percent
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of total world
electricity
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generation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, electricity, production, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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