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Band 4.5

You recently visited a department store. One member of staff at the store was very helpful to you and you want to tell the store about this. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter. - say which part of the store you visited - ⁠describe how this member of staff was helpful to you - ⁠say what you would like the manager to do

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my
satfication
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satisfaction
 regarding your staff
member
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 and services. Actually, I wanted to buy
the
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a
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 new
apple
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Apple
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 phone, and your staff helped me
alot
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a lot
 with
the
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apply
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excellent guidance. My friend suggested
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to me
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me
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apply
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about
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apply
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your electronic department store which is located in
the
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apply
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Toronto city, it is not only
big
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a big
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 store but
also
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 has
varieties
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a variety
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 of electronic
gudgets
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gadgets
.
Moreover
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, one of
the
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your team
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member
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members
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 assisted me regarding
cell
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my cell
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 phone
as well as
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 he told me how to
opreate
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operate
 it and how I can make
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an icloude
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icloude
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iCloude
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 ID there to save my all important data.
Appart
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Apart
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 from that,
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the
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staffs
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staff
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 were so polite
with
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to
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 me and they have many
qulities
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qualities
such
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 as communication and
cooperatiion
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cooperation
 skills.
Besides
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this
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, your team
member
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 offered me
10
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a 10
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% discount because of
victory day
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Victory Day
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, He described
the
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every single
features
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feature
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 of the mobile phone in
details
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detail
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 which is
gold
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a gold
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 key for me.
In addition
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, I intend to suggest
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to you
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you
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apply
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that it would be good if you give
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a spacial
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spacial
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special
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 treat
for
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to
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 your staff
member
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, he will be happy or you give
card
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a card
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. I am really
gladful
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grateful
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by
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for
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 his kindness and help, it was
the
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a
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 nice experience. Your faithful Dalbir Kaur

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Grammar
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar mistakes.
Coherence
Try to organize your letter by using clear paragraphs for each point.
Cohesion
Use simpler sentences and clear language to express your ideas.
Positive Feedback
You showed appreciation for the staff's help, which is a nice touch.
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You included specific details about the service you received, which is helpful.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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