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Writing Samples
Band 4

You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problems and explain how you feel propose a solution and ask the landlord to take action.

Dear Sir , I am writing
this
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 letter to express my deep grievance about
an
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the
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 insufficient availability of hot water and heating during
morning
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the morning
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 time and between 5pm to 6pm in the evening. My name is Harvi and I am living in your premises as a tenant with my three best friends. Currently, we are experiencing a problem of not getting proper warm water for taking a bath and
do
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doing
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 the dishes in the winter season.
Last
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 week I used freezing water for bathing
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as
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and as
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 a result, I got sick
thus
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 I missed my two crucial lectures. I believe you should a need professional person to tackle
this
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 convoluted situation. I know a technician who will
available
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be available
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 at your convenience
with
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at
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cheap
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a cheap
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 price. I hope
this
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 problem will be addressed at its earliest and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Harvi

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task response
You should include a brief introduction of your situation at the beginning of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one clear main idea to keep the reader focused.
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Use a slightly more formal tone. For example, instead of 'I got sick,' you could say 'I became unwell.'
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You clearly stated the problems you are facing.
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Your proposal for a technician is a good suggestion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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