The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
sigificant
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significant
worldwide sales of diverse kinds of digital
games
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between 2000 and 2006.
Overall
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, in all years,
Handheld
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the Handheld
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section wins the battle when it comes to the most
purshaced
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purchased
items by people.
Moreover
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, online
games
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have the least amount of money spent on them by mankind. In 2004, the sales of handheld
game
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games
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scored 16 billion dollars,
while
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mobile phone entertainment apps got less than 6
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billions
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billion
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.
Furthermore
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, in 2005, console
games
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had achieved nearly 3
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billions
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billion
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before they were sold by approximately 5 billion of cash 2 years earlier.
According to
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the graph, in 2000, not a single person had bought online
games
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,
while
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other kids spent tremendous
amount
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amounts
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of money on console parts.
In addition
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, in 2006, mobile phone
games
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had obtained 7
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billions
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billion
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which was less than the number of online ones by 3
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billions
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billion
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.
Also
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, in 2002, both of them received the same amount of cash in terms of the
sale's
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sale
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rate.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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