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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.
The line graph and the pie chart here
is
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are
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 about the
age
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 of
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crimnials
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criminals
criminal
 and the
crime
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 type
last
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 year in
UK
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the UK
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.
Overall
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, we can see in these two graphs somehow the
age
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 of
cramnial
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children
 related to the type of
crime
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, and
the
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apply
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most of them
is
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are
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youngh pepole
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young people
.
Firstly
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, let us
stars
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start
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 with the
age
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 of
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crimnials
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criminals
criminal
, the
highier
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highest
age
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 of
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crimnials
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criminals
criminal
last
Linking Words
 year
is
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was
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from
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for
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youngh
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young
 people,
is
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apply
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from 12 to 28, but the
highier
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highest
 one
is
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was
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 20
by
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with
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 80
number of
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apply
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crimes, and from
age
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 28 to 60 the number of crimes os from 20 and start to
dicreace
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decrease
 until stop with around 10.
Secondly
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, we will see the types of
crime
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 in
uk
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UK
last
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 year the huge one
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was
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violent
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a violent
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crime
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46
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at 46
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% and maybe because of the younger
age
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 of
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crimnials
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criminals
criminal
, and after that comes
the
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apply
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property
crime
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by
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at
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 23% and
the
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apply
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drug
crime
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by
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at
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 22
percent
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per cent
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 almost the same , and the
last
Linking Words
 one is
public
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a public
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 order
crime
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 9
percent
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per cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crimnials, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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