The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The current bar chart compares the proportion of
men
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and
women
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who worked out regularly divided into 6 different age categories in Australia in 2010.
It is clear that
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approximately half of the population did regular physical activity in Australia in that certain year.
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,
women
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were more active than
men
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in all age groups except for the youngest category.
Men
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aged 15 to 24 were more active physically than
women
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at a percentage of 52.8 relative to 47.7% for
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. On the other edge of the age range
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and
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aged 65 and over did roughly the same physical activity at 47%. 39% of
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from
35-to-44-year-old
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group did physical activity making them the least active group than other
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and
women
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. Between 42 to 45 per cent of
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from 25 to 34 years old and 45 to 64 years old were physically active. 48.9% of
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aged 25 to 34 and almost 53% of
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worked out in that year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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